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Re: Legend Of Critical

Post  motorapter on Mon Sep 07, 2009 5:40 pm

Guys I've made a story about TOP it's just the start of the story hope ya guys like it.

Title: The Legend of Critical
Once upon a time there were twins who were born on an island called “Ascaron”. The two babies were named by their parents, one was called Abyss Kara and the other one was called Goddess Kara. The two twins were like rivals, Abyss liked to make fun of people while Goddess didn’t she was a good girl and Abyss was the opposite of her. 30 years passed Abyss was concentrating in Dark Magic, while Goddess was full of kindness because of that she received Light Magic from the 3 gods Ascarion, Isyer, Saritan. One night Abyss was creating a magic spell that will summon a demon dragon from the dark. Abyss used her all her power and suddenly an earthquake happened, from a big cracked on the ground came out a Dragon it was Black. Goddess saw it and used her powers to defeat the Black Dragon, Abyss was happy and was angry she was happy because she summoned the Black Dragon out from the dark, she was angry because of Goddess interfering on her work. Abyss and the Black Dragon joined together and attacked Goddess Kara , when Abyss and the Black Dragon used all of their power and attacked Goddess Kara, Goddess Kara was badly damaged. But then Goddess Kara didn’t give up she used all of her powers which badly drained her life force she destroyed Abyss and teleported the Black Dragon to a cursed lair which sealed the Black Dragon forever. Ascarion, Isyer, Saritan saw this and they used their light magic and revived Goddess Kara. Goddess Kara was sent to Heaven and she became the Lord of all 3 Islands Ascaron, Magical Ocean and Deep Blue. In a dark dimension 8 Abyss Lord summoned Abyss Kara’s soul from the dead and revived her. After reviving Abyss Kara the 8 Abyss Lord Phantom Baron, Evil Beast, Phoenix, Drakan, Tyran, Demon Flame, Despair and Tidal praised Abyss Kara as their Supreme Abyss Lord.

To be continued

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Re: Legend Of Critical

Post  Lilking on Wed Sep 09, 2009 11:54 am

......... wth lol looks like the story from the top site xD
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Post  motorapter on Wed Sep 09, 2009 2:03 pm

really? lol need to work on continuation.

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Post  StorHacks on Thu Sep 10, 2009 4:13 am

Lilking wrote:......... wth lol looks like the story from the top site xD
lol give him a chance to write ^^
let his creativity juices flow ^^
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Post  Lilking on Thu Sep 10, 2009 1:02 pm

whats with u and jucies hacks >.> ?
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Post  motorapter on Sat Sep 19, 2009 1:27 pm

The 2nd Part

(3 Years Passed)
Abyss Supreme Kara and Goddess Kara were still on combat fighting each other day and night. Till one day Goddess Kara was damaged badly due to Abyss’s Dark Power. She wasn’t able to fight anymore so she used some of her power and sent her power to 4 babies. On one day the 4 babies were born in the same year same day same time. Abyss Lord Demon Flame told this to Abyss Supreme Kara, after hearing this Abyss Supreme Kara summoned 4 Abyss Lord these 4 Abyss Lord are Abyss Lord Tidal, Drakan, Phoenix and Despair, she told them to hunt down the 4 babies who Goddess Kara gave her power to. The 4 Abyss Lord did what they’ve been told they went in different ways north, south, east, west. In the 4 babies there were 2 families who were once in a guild called Critical. The 1st family has 1 member who is once with the guild Critical and he is the father of the baby who shall be born the father’s named is Stizer. Stizer was the leader of the Rage Team he was the strongest Crusader, Crusader is a class who are experts in swords they are fast and strong. Abyss Lord Phoenix was the first one to arrive in the south village, Stizer knew he was coming so he prepared his sword and he was ready for combat. Abyss Lord Phoenix was told to kill every single person in the village to decrease the chance of the baby being alive. Abyss Lord Phoenix went into every house and killed every single person and when he thought that all the people have been killed, he saw another house which is still not checked he rushed in and prepared his swords to kill every person inside it. Before Abyss Lord Phoenix got in the house Stizer used his sword and attacked Abyss Lord Phoenix, Abyss Lord Phoenix used his swords and fights back. Stizer quickly dodged Abyss Lord Phoenix’s attack, but then Abyss Lord Phoenix used his dark energy and created a ball that was able to destroy a whole mountain he aimed it on Stizer and released it quickly. Stizer knew he wouldn’t win he stayed at his place and prepared to destroy the ball. The ball came quick and strikes Stizer, Stizer was badly damaged and was tired and weak he used all his energy and life force and created a force field that would block any attack and human around her wife’s and baby’s house. Abyss Lord Phoenix tried to destroy it but he wasn’t able to he went back to Abyss Supreme Kara and he was punished.

Hope u like it ~~

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Re: Legend Of Critical

Post  Lilking on Mon Sep 21, 2009 12:36 pm

no champion T.T nice story lol
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Post  motorapter on Tue Sep 22, 2009 8:59 pm

Be patient my friend the next story will be about champs. Wink

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Post  StorHacks on Thu Sep 24, 2009 2:48 am

-poke Jaja-
wanna provide some pics? 8p
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Post  Lilking on Thu Sep 24, 2009 4:23 pm

lol she dosent even know we exists anymore Very Happy ur poking empty space in air T.T
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Post  StorHacks on Fri Sep 25, 2009 1:48 am

-poke kingky-
well she is in my FB ^^
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Post  Lilking on Fri Sep 25, 2009 11:21 pm

i reapt my same post agen Razz
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Post  motorapter on Wed Oct 07, 2009 6:25 pm

sry guys i need some more time on the next story due to a typhoon in philippines our things were destroyed so i dont have time to make the story.

So pls wait TY

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Post  Lilking on Fri Oct 09, 2009 8:57 am

eer man wth takes your time O.O
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Post  motorapter on Tue Oct 13, 2009 6:52 pm

Whats up guys Iam already done on the next story hope you like it.

A few minutes later Tidal reached the northern village the village is known as the Village of Defense due to lots of Champions living in the village. The other family who was once in the guild of Critical lives in the village, at the time the baby was born his mother died because she was weak and is very easy getting sick. The baby’s father was named Krono, Krono sensed that something bad will happen so he prepared his hammer also know as the “Hammer of the Sky” the hammer was given to Krono after he left Critical. Tidal went into the village and had combat with the other Champions in the village, but they were killed one by one Krono charged out and attacked Tidal, Tidal was slammed he was damaged so he got angry and he got up and attacked Krono it was an exciting battle. At last Krono and Tidal were damaged badly they were tired and weak, Krono used possesion and slash Tidal with all his energy Tidal was slammed 50 meters below the ground. He was sent back by Abyss Supreme Kara and was punished his punish was being sealed at Black Dragon’s Lair for 10 days. After the battle Krono went back to his house and rested, he was thinking a good name for his baby at last he thought of a name and the baby was named Kingdude. Stizer’s wife named their baby StorHacks. Although Krono won the battle there are still danger on the last two remaining babies.

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Re: Legend Of Critical

Post  Lilking on Thu Oct 15, 2009 11:59 am

YEAH WOOT!!! IM IN THE STORY YEAH!!!!!!! CHAMPS FTW :p WONDERFUL!!
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Post  StorHacks on Tue Dec 08, 2009 12:03 pm

lol.
Where is the story?!
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Re: Legend Of Critical

Post  motorapter on Wed Mar 03, 2010 5:29 pm

Sorry Guys for the delay because of our computer broken we got it reformatted and now our microsoft word is fix i can start the story again. So here u go, hope u guys liked it ^^.

Abyss Lord Despair has already spotted the baby at the east village known for its healers which are extremely experts in healing it was also called “Angel’s Palace”. Abyss Lord Despair carefully dealt with the situation she grabbed a woman and changed her clothes. She sneaked into the village and she seeks the baby. The baby’s name was Jajanmyun her mother’s name was Fiona, Abyss Lord Despair felt Fiona’s energy. Abyss Lord Despair was able to do this because she was friends with Fiona. When they were 4 years old but Abyss Lord Despair’s greediness for power grew and grew and one day she went to the Angel’s Palace’s forbidden room and unlock a staff which was made from sorceress who gathered 49 souls of greed, hate and sad. She took the staff and gained enormous powers that no one can imagine. Abyss Lord Despair tracked Fiona’s energy and followed her until she reached her house; Abyss Lord Despair got into the house and launches a combat with Fiona. It was a cleric to cleric combat; they both used their magic and launch a skill called “Spiritual Bolt”. After a few hours of combat they were both worn out, their stamina were low it happens that the situation is who hits first gets to win. Despair uses the last batch of her energy and calls the Anubis, Fiona was already unable to standup due to tiredness and the damage done to her. But Fiona didn’t give up she sacrifices her life and used the spell that was forbidden for a hundred years, the “Heaven Angel Spell” Fiona used the spell and thousand of pure white magic destroyed the Anubis and sends Despair to the lair of the black dragon which she was sealed on a cursed stone. The Angel’s Palace was safe but it was sad because Jajanmyun lost her mother, so Fiona’s Cousin Arthur adopt Jajanmyun and took care of her. While this time the last Abyss Lord Drakan is on his way to the last village to destroy the 4th baby.

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